BEACHB-oysters' (sand-corny) POETRY PEARLS - YULEtide-edit...

[rasmus skotte]

By way of compensation, here's a modest addendum devoted to the most notorious session and goshdarnit if Jardine isn't in this one as well:

Moo! Do less, ever I flame 'em... Al! Fire vessel! O doom!

HI(barbe)ku'drome with all the fixins & trimmins prepared by 'Smoking' john k on Alan's island (Mr. Jardine likes his moo-food done FLAMIN' RARE) OR this IS from the 'FIRE' sessions (Mrs. o'Leary's Cow):

JARDINEs GARDEN PARTY

>"Moo? Do less - EVER ...
I (!) flame 'em!" ~ 'AL! FIRE-vessel!'
"O ** ******' doom"<

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And now, It's About Time to RE-introduce for your reading pleasure ...
THE GREAT DOUBLE SMiLE TANKA'DROME (5/7/5/7/7 x2) by john k. ['Fred was the Beach Boys' manager back then: Fred Vail (for some reason nicknamed ' 'Lulu'(?)]:

     >SMiLE'r PRELIMS<

                 -I-
->"AL, up! a.k.a. WIN!

Eek! LOOK; slow on WONDERFUL?

Ullapool decal art!

*Lunar* "DADA"-ism row *Mars*.

L.A. prelims: "All racks are ...

                 -II-
... paper! (ask CARL, L.A.)"

SMiLE'r pals ram: WORMS! "I* (a

dad) *RAN(!) ultra-laced?

LOOP, AL!" 'Lulu'/FRED: "Now-now;

Ol' Skool!" KEENI WAKA PULA!<-

[JK]

[Fred Vail (for some reason nicknamed ' 'Lulu'(?)]:

 

Wow! A double tanka of my simple palindrome----I am truly humbled. :=)

[rasmus skotte]

Now that we've come this far (OUT?!), why not go ALL IN, making that "KEENI WAKA" even keenier & whackier!
Are we all keen on doing it?
Right ... If we combine john's (who should be very proud!) SMiLE haiku- & tanka'dromes, we got ourselves 2 1/2 tanka-palindrome. So let's build a (tripel-) SMiLE tanka'drome triptych: I suggest that we make the 3'rd verse into an 'Elements
Suite'. WATER is already covered (the Fire-VESSEL) & "DADA"-ism from verse I). FIRE too ('moo' & 'flame'). All we need is some Vega-T (earth).
And maybe we can borrow and somehow fit D Cunningham's 'AIR-line into the middle line(?):
"Yon "AIR" ?! BRIAN - OY!"
So, DIG IN!

THE GREAT DOUBLE SMiLE TANKA'DROME (5/7/5/7/7 x2) by john k. ['Fred was the Beach Boys' manager back then: Fred Vail (for some reason nicknamed ' 'Lulu'(?)]:

     >SMiLE'r PRELIMS<

                 -I-
->"AL, up! a.k.a. WIN!

Eek! LOOK; slow on WONDERFUL?

Ullapool decal art!

*Lunar* "DADA"-ism row *Mars*.

L.A. prelims: "All racks are ...

                 -II-
... paper! (ask CARL, L.A.)"

SMiLE'r pals ram: WORMS! "I* (a

dad) *RAN(!) ultra-laced?

LOOP, AL!" 'Lulu'/FRED: "Now-now;

Ol' Skool!" KEENI WAKA PULA!<-

 verse III:) >"Moo? Do less - EVER ...

I (!) flame 'em!" ~ 'AL! FIRE-vessel!'

"O ** ******' doom"<

[JK]

A third verse!? Just when I thought I could stop tying my brain in knots and get back to doing the thing I'm paid to do, lol.

I suspect you'll get it done first, but I shall certainly put my mind to it...

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Wait, now I see: The new elemental verse would have to be the middle verse, Not to interfere with the tankas already completed. I don't know if that's possible ...[Please remember that "I RAN" is also sort of a SMiLE-related title!]

[JK]

Wait, now I see: The new elemental verse would have to be the middle verse, Not to interfere with the tankas already completed. I don't know if that's possible ...[Please remember that "I RAN" is also sort of a SMiLE-related title!]

That does complicate matters, but you're quite right----it's the only way.

I see your tankas stretch the rules somewhat----I assume it's deliberate?

1) 6-7-6-8-7
2) -----------
3) 6-7-5-7-8

If so, it gives us a little leeway with that new second verse rhythm-wise.

I have some ideas.

 

[JK]

Rasmus, this is what I have right now, with various jk stylistic traits reinstated. You're most welcome to reassemble it à la rs. :=)

1.
Al, up----a.k.a... win!
Eek! Look slow on wonderful
Ullapool decal art.
Lunar dadaism row mars
L.A. prelims. All racks...

2.         
...are not a saga, sire. Tawny
DNA, the less ever I flame.
Parsnips pot an air by Brian.
A top spins. Rap 'em, Al!
Fire vessel, eh, Tandyn?

3.
Water is a gas, a toner. Ask Carl.
L.A. smiler pals ram worms.
I, a dad, ran ultra-laced.
Loop Al, Lulu. Fred: "Now, now...
ol' skool." (Keeni waka pula.)

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L O(L) & B E H O L D:
pREY: SILENCE! ALL SMILEY SMILER & GUESTS, PLEASE RISE!
THIS IS A DEFINING MOMENT ON THIS BEACH BOYS FORUM & IN BB-FANDON ALLOVER.
OUR OWN john k HAS CRAFTED A RECORD BREAKING AND WONDERFUL MASTERPIECE ...
1) THE LONGEST SMiLE-PALINDROME EVER
2) THE LONGEST BEACH BOYS-PALINDROME EVER
3)  THE LONGEST TANKA-PALINDROME IN HISTORY - PERIOD!

Feel free to share it (With john k's credit!), print it out (with all the other great ones), frame it and place it in your Beach Boys gallery!
ENJOY:

1.
Al, up----a.k.a... win!
Eek! Look slow on wonderful
Ullapool decal art.
Lunar dadaism row mars
L.A. prelims. All racks...

2.         
...are not a saga, sire. Tawny
DNA, the less ever I flame.
Parsnips pot an air by Brian.
A top spins. Rap 'em, Al!
Fire vessel, eh, Tandyn?

3.
Water is a gas, a toner. Ask Carl.
L.A. smiler pals ram worms.
I, a dad, ran ultra-laced.
Loop Al, Lulu. Fred: "Now, now...
ol' skool." (Keeni waka pula.)

[rasmus skotte]

^^Everyone should really appreciate and name-check all the SMiLE-related titles and persons mentioned in john k's ^^
SMiLE TANKA'DROME TRIPTYCH above (though not always Hi-li'ted!). So here comes a key:

AL,CARL, BRIAN
"LOOK", "WONDERFUL" & ["Love To Say:] DADA"
From Verse 2 (an 'Elements Suite'):
FIRE + flame
"AIR"
Earth (parsnips pots + top)
WATER (Fire-VESSEL + DADA, Water & gas + "now, now" from Cool Cool Water ...

Finally: TANDYN (Almer from 'The Associaltion')
Toner ("TONES"), SMiLEr, ["Do You Like:] WORMS" & "I ---- RAN"
["Loop de] LOOP" (Al's own SMiLE-like ordeal!)
FRED (Vail: the Beach Boys-manager back then)
And the great SMiLE-quote: "KEENI WAKA PULA"
And don't forget to read the whole thing BACKWARDS, just once ...

[JK]

^^Everyone should really appreciate and name-check all the SMiLE-related titles and persons mentioned in john k's ^^
SMiLE TANKA'DROME TRIPTYCH above (though not always Hi-li'ted!). So here comes a key:

AL,CARL, BRIAN
"LOOK", "WONDERFUL" & ["Love To Say:] DADA"
From Verse 2 (an 'Elements Suite'):
FIRE + flame
"AIR"
Earth (parsnips pots + top)
WATER (Fire-VESSEL + DADA, Water & gas + "now, now" from Cool Cool Water ...

Finally: TANDYN (Almer from 'The Associaltion')
Toner ("TONES"), SMiLEr, ["Do You Like:] WORMS" & "I ---- RAN"
["Loop de] LOOP" (Al's own SMiLE-like ordeal!)
FRED (Vail: the Beach Boys-manager back then)
And the great SMiLE-quote: "KEENI WAKA PULA"
And don't forget to read the whole thing BACKWARDS, just once ...

Wow. Thank you, Rasmus----and for your kind words!

Perhaps I should add that Tandyn Almer is credited with co-authoring "Sail On, Sailor".

And that Blondie and Ricky get an oblique mention as "flame"...   

[rasmus skotte]

So, what's ^UP^ with "TAWNY"? Well, it can be a drinkable 'Port - a DO or DIE' from Surf's Up!

WHEW! Now, lets slow down a bit a give overworked JOHN a break ...
Instead we could examine some nice but overlooked palindromes from earlier:
The first is an 'old' one (january '16), that I just discovered yesterday - for the upteenth time starring Al!
It's from another topic and the set-up is quite interesting!
One member makes the 'observation' that: "Al is the little mammal who somehow lived through extinction"(the captain)!
From then it takes john k. only 57 minutes to make the following palindrome(!) featuring 'Bob' (Robert) Lamm from Chicago and a L.A.-diva (Karen Lamm? who's later 'spotted' BIGTIME by our Dennis!
Which brings us to the next palindrome: Starring an x-rated Tsar Dennis. Both palindromes are getting the inevitable spin inside the old HAIKU'DROME.
[As per usual, when you're short a syllable/word or two, always ask the magic *stars*, use 'em wisely and leave the rest to the readers' good taste! and imagination ...

Two-fer haiku-palindrome(s) by john k:

>Avid Al stops 'Bob'

(Lamm): Am I mammal?" (Bob spots -

*** L.A. diva)<

                        ~

>Shoot, o how *: Tsar (!)

Dennis kayaks in Nedra's

two hot ******'  "OOH"s!!<

[JK]

Ah yes, the magic *stars*----what needless headaches they prevent! And what fun to fill in mentally...

Have a good weekend, Rasmus, everyone. 

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3.
Water is a gas, a toner. Ask Carl.
L.A. smiler pals ram worms.
I, a dad, ran ultra-laced.
Loop Al, Lulu. Fred: "Now, now...
ol' skool." (Keeni waka pula.)[/b]

From 3'rd verse, we still need to solve this mystery: Who might that "Lulu" be, chanting "KEENI WAKA PULA" right after Fred 'ultra-laced' Vail's intervention?
That is a no-brainer once we think HAWAIIAN!

She'd be the elusive and somewhat palindromic >"Honolulu Lulu" *Lono[h]< of Jan & Dean fame [*one of the Gods]:

>---- 'LULU: ...[Fred: 'Now, now ...
ol' skool!'] ... "KEENI WAKA PULA."<


What of the word 'SIRE' from verse 2? Let's not forget:
a)>BRI's Sir B!<
b)Sire Records hosted Brian's first official solo album, featuring the SMiLE'sque Rio Grande
c)Mike & Bruce performed To Sir[e] With Love WITH LULU(!), 2008

Now it's official: The official SMiLE-tanka'drome tour-de-force is absolutely perfect in ALL departments - albeit 'convoluted/enveloped in places. No questins asked!

[JK]

Mike & Bruce performed To Sir[e] With Love WITH LULU(!), 2008

Now it's official: The official SMiLE-tanka'drome tour-de-force is absolutely perfect in ALL departments - albeit 'convoluted/enveloped in places. No questions asked!

They didn't perform it in Ullapool, by any chance?!

Thank you, Rasmus, for tidying up these loose ends. (Happily, swollen-headedness is not an issue in cyberspace.)

[rasmus skotte]

I see your tankas stretch the rules somewhat----I assume it's deliberate?

1) 6-7-6-8-7
2) -----------
3) 6-7-5-7-8

If so, it gives us a little leeway with that new second verse rhythm-wise.

I have some ideas.

 

One last item of unfinished business on the agen. Promise.
Since I'M the one claiming their perfection, allow me a re-tallyin'-the-tankas maneuver. But it's still gonna be tankaPLUS:

1'st line: a.k.a. as a-ka (5)
3'rd line: "decal" as dec'l (7)
Pushing "are" back from 6'th to 5'th line (7)
6'th line "Sire" uttered as 1 syllable(7)
7'th line DNA as D'NA(7)
8'th line: "Brian in 1 syllable:(7)

So that leaves us with:
5/7/7/7/7
7/7/7/6/7
10/7/7/7/7+1

Lots of 7'th, which is my lucky number and still i.m.o. within the realm of perfexion, TANKsA-LOT

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Correxion (not very good with numbers):
5/7/5/7/7 (just perfect)
7/8/7/6/7
10/7/7/7/7+1
Mind you, this palindrome is a smorgasbord of possibilities!

[JK]

Correxion (not very good with numbers):
5/7/5/7/7 (just perfect)
7/8/7/6/7
10/7/7/7/7+1
Mind you, this palindrome is a smorgasbord of possibilities!

"Smörgåsbord ... a delightful (if not overwhelming) array of choices ... with frequent trips to the table encouraged."
Sounds about right to me. 

[rasmus skotte]

Rasmus, this is what I have right now, with various jk stylistic traits reinstated. You're most welcome to reassemble it à la rs. :=)

Hopefully we're all ready to respectfully sink our teeth into a CORNyCOPIA of john's SMiLE triple-tanka'drome (in a final interpretation of mine - of it all).
I (for one :>) happily accept that the great SMiLE-chant [AND Fred Vail's 'intervention'] comes AFTER the tankas - as a spiritual conclusion!
[In this version, all the titles, names & quotes DIRECTLY linked to SMiLE are written "IN CAPITALS WITHIN QUOTATION MARKS", while all the ones, indirectly linked or just  Beach Boys-related are written IN CAPITAL LETTERS (all of which, explained in earlier posts)]:

>SMiLE'r PRELIMs<                                             [a SMiLE (triple-tanka) palindrome by john k]


                         -I-

-> "AL" up - a.ka. win!

'Eek!, "LOOK's" low!  On "WONDERFUL"? >

Ullapool Decal Art!, >

Lunar "DADA"ism row Mars!'

L.A. prelims: 'All racks are: >

                        -II-

n o t  a SAGA, SIRE: >

TAWNY-DNA (the less!)'.

'Ever, I FLAME parsnips: >

(pot!). An "AIR" by "BRIAN" (a top >

spins). 'Rap 'em! "AL" : "FIRE"~vessel!

                        -III-

Eh, TANDYN?  "WATER IS: >

A GAS!", a "TONEr" (ask "CARL")'.

L.A. "SMiLE'r"-pals: >

ram "WORMS"!  "I [a dad] RAN" >

ultra-laced!? 'LOOP, "AL"!'   'Lulu: >

                           ~

>["FRED": 'Now, now; ol' skool!] : >

"K E E N I  W A K A  P U L A"<-

[JK]

You have been busy, sir. So was I for a while last night, trying to reassemble the whole thing as a perfect tankadrome triptych but it was fast losing its original character so I stopped. But you succeeded----with a spiritual conclusion to boot. I can't compete with that!

As for my own spiritual conclusion (Dutch Wisdom):

In theory, you could repeat the "won" of "wonderful" and Fred's first "now" in equal numbers all the way to infinity and still preserve the palindromic form but in practice you wouldn't get past "won".

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>SMiLE'r PRELIMs<                                             [a SMiLE (triple-tanka) palindrome by john k]


                         -I-

-> "AL" up - a.ka. win!

'Eek!, "LOOK's" low!  On "WONDERFUL"? >

Ullapool Decal Art!, >

Lunar "DADA"ism row Mars!'

L.A. prelims: 'All racks are: >

                        -II-

n o t  a SAGA, SIRE: >

TAWNY-DNA (the less!)'.

'Ever, I FLAME parsnips: >

(pot!). An "AIR" by "BRIAN" (a top >

spins). 'Rap 'em! "AL" : "FIRE"~vessel!

                        -III-

Eh, TANDYN?  "WATER IS: >

A GAS!", a "TONEr" (ask "CARL")'.

L.A. "SMiLE'r"-pals: >

ram "WORMS"!  "I [a dad] RAN" >

ultra-laced!? 'LOOP, "AL"!'   'Lulu: >

                           ~

>["FRED": 'Now, now; ol' skool!] : >

"K E E N I  W A K A  P U L A"<-

So where are BRUCE, MIKE & DENNIS, one might be name-checking!? No worries, they're there!
Dennis is implied/indicated TWICE, with a bonus palindrome to hoot - pardon: Boot ...:

"All 'racks' are NOT a saga, Sire!" >All racks? "Ask CARL, L.A.!"< (Dennis CARL Wilson).
Mike is quoted ONCE: 'WATER is a gas!' from Cool Cool Water ("cool water is SUCH a gas!").
Bruce? (and this is far-fetched): "LULU" performed 'To Sir[e] With Love', flanked by BRUCE & Mike in 2013!

Told you, it's perfection and a smorgasbord in ALL departments ...
[P.S.: The singles, GV and H&V have been left out of this SMiLE-poetry 'album' (Beatles-style!)]

[JK]

So where are BRUCE, MIKE & DENNIS, one might be name-checking!? No worries, they're there!
Dennis is implied/indicated TWICE, with a bonus palindrome to hoot - pardon: Boot ...:

"All 'racks' are NOT a saga, Sire!" >All racks? "Ask CARL, L.A.!"< (Dennis CARL Wilson).
Mike is quoted ONCE: 'WATER is a gas!' from Cool Cool Water ("cool water is SUCH a gas!").
Bruce? (and this is far-fetched): "LULU" performed 'To Sir[e] With Love', flanked by BRUCE & Mike in 2013!

Told you, it's perfection and a smorgasbord in ALL departments ...
[P.S.: The singles, GV and H&V have been left out of this SMiLE-poetry 'album' (Beatles-style!)]

More loose ends tied up! (I see nothing far-fetched about the Bruce/Lulu connection.)

Maybe GV and H&V can share a palindrome of their own (something for a rainy day?)... 

[CenturyDeprived]

This is what happens when I  go on this board before I have coffee in the morning.

Similar to a map of hidden loot from The Goonies… instructions on how to find some BB buried treasure in Durrie's attic shelving unit:

Top reer: acetates… Parks!
 

Or… Brian junking SMiLE, and instead eating vinyl records... munching on the very magic he created... along with some hash brownies for good measure.


Skrap (SMiLE box) set… ate career + pot!

[rasmus skotte]

This is what happens when I  go on this board before I have coffee in the morning.

Similar to a map of hidden loot from The Goonies… instructions on how to find some BB buried treasure in Durrie's attic shelving unit:

Top reer: acetates… Parks!
 

Or… Brian junking SMiLE, and instead eating vinyl records... munching on the very magic he created... along with some hash brownies for good measure.


Skrap (SMiLE box) set… ate career + pot!

Just when we were running a bit low on fresh approaches! So could we have even more NEW ideas from fellow poetry-oysters waxing lyrical about The Beach Boys!
[ Some members here are "just funnin' with you" (KDS). I'm more like punnin'-runnin'! So please keep that in mind:]...

once one's done stuffin'
the stunnin' & cunnin' or
sunny-down-snuffin' ...

Frankly it would be sad & surprising if Mr. Van Dyke Parks' humble old self wasn't represented in a ...
milestone-SMiLE triple-tanka palindrome-poem - PAR'KSellence!
Besides authoring the final ONE-LINER(s) [and I still see his TAWNY DNA and call it a drinkable 'Port ~ a DO-or-DIE' (from SURF'S UP!]. Van Dyke luckily DOES make a 'cameo' appearance by name; namely in the 5'th line (verse I):
"P(relims) A(ll) R(ac)KS!

Nice ones, CD & jk! And have a great - and creative weekend EVERYONE, ANYWHERE!

[JK]

Great stuff, CD, coffee or no coffee. And welcome to our modest band (well, power trio, I suppose).

Nice work there, Rasmus, as always...

And before the accusations start to fly, one would do well to remember that "anal" is Lana in reverse.