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Now that we have covered almost all bases...
Beach Boys-related:                                                                                                                                                                                                                         anagrams, palindromes, limericks, haikus, tankas, a sonnet, a triptych, a senryu, a haiku-plaindrome, a tanka-palindrome etc.
- there's still this tricky one left...

It seems there's only one made ever so far..Remotely music- but not Beach Boys-related (unless we refer it to Brian's brain 'temple' and the 'disc' being SMiLE) made by Will Thomas:

Tango-noter, a disc I peek at
In a temple: hot sin, a mad rat;
Ere we mentally handicapped person, a man
is to help me tan;
I  take epics, I dare, to no gnat.

My suggestion is that we build on the magic formula, originally dreamed up by CenturyDeprived (which later inspired a couple more palindromes  including a haiku'drome):

[first limerick line: 9 syllables including an end-rhyme to match the word 'mixes' (this  could be one word, two words or part of a longer one)]
[second line, starting with 2 syllables+] -on no; TON-o-SMiLE mono mixes
[3rd line:] a.k.A. sex I'm on, O'
[4th line:] M(e)L: "I'm SO NOT on, NO!"
[last line with 9 syllables (plus/minus) again including and end-rhyme to match lines I and II

('TON-o-SMiLE' is worded similar to 'Stack-o-Tracks' and M(e)L being Mike E(dward) Love.) Thats the challenge. Can it be done? LET'S DO THIS!!!

Sorry, but two many syllables in second row! Allow me to simplify the palindrome a bit:

I. [9 syllables including an end-rhyme to fit with the word 'mixes']
II: -on NO; TON-o-SMiLE mono mixes
III: a.k.A, sex I'm on, O'
IV: M(e)L: "I'm SO NOT on, NO!"
V: [same requirements as line I's]

Found another limerick-palindrome on-line. Very off-topic and silly indeed! - made up by LetThemEatKait:

'Otto*Saw' was ill as a motto,
Be it a non-mutual ogre risotto
Sir, ergo l'autumn
On a tie bottom
as all I saw was Otto

{*originally "Otto's 'aw' " whatever THAT means?}

is "rasmus skotte" itself a wordgame ? Am I the only idiot?

Here comes an Easter egg (hopefully not on my face!) for The Sandbox people...
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                              

Being called 'wordgame' is fine by me... My WORD - I'm GAME!
PALimerick made by LetThemEatKate                                                                                                                                                                                                                               Actually, there IS an 'Otto' in Beach Boys history: Billy Hinsche's father, OTTO 'POP' (- a nice double'drome b.t.w.!)
And finally... A fullblown (out of all proportions?) Beach Boys-interpretation of Will Thomas' PALimerick:                                                                                                                                                                                                                               

Maybe we'll just have to realise, that  collectively we cannot design a Beach Boys-related palindromic limerick of our own(?) Taking comfort in the fact that WILL Thomas HAS invented his comvoluted brilliant 'Brian/SMiLE-PALimerick' for us to enjoy and be happy with!
But before we give up, let me add 2 more POSSIBLE building blocks into our effort:

I:)  [6 syllables +] -se nixes...                                                                                                                                                                                                               II:) on: 'NO Ton-o-SMiLE mono mixes!'
III:)(a.k.A. sex I'm on - O')
IV:) M(e)L: "I'm So NOT on - NO!"
V:) ~ Sexines' [+ 5 syllables including end rhyme parallel to I & II]

Perhaps something with <Jesse (as in Uncle Jesse) nixes> in line I to get <sexiness> in line V? It does leave you with <ej> in line V. Unless you make those letters someone's initials. I don't think we should give up yet...

This isn't fantastic, but it's a stab in the right direction (perhaps). (Of course, all the hard work had already been done when I arrived.) At the mention of sex (three times!!) I just knew Dennis had to be in there somewhere. The first "beat" in line 3 is on the second "a"----although the accentuation is a bit weird generally...

Sex if dat Dennis Jesse nixes,
On no ton o' SMiLE mono mixes  
Aka sex I'm on: "O
Mel, I'm so not on! No
Sexiness!" E.J. sinned, Tad fixes

 
Mel is Mel Roberts, who took pictures of Californian beach boys (lower case) including one Tad Bennett.
E.J. is of course E.J. Thomas Hall at the University of Akron, Ohio, where Brian and Jeff Beck played in October 2013. :smokin

Only right that Dennis should appear - also 'cause it's a SMiLE-driven PALimerick - and he WAS after all Brian's 'dumb angel'...
So - mission impossible accomplished and it can now be truly said: 'And Your 'drome Comes True' thanks to cd/rs/jk.

^^The 'WANNABE' reading of John K's solution:^^

I:) Dennis/jesse (from Jesse & The Rippers - A John Stamos alias, being a wannabe-Dennis and Mike-sycophant?)
III:) "I'm" (myself, rs or anyone being the Brian/SMiLE-sycophant!)
IV:) 'Mel' (back to being M(e)L = Mike)
V:) 'E.J.' = Elton John (originally a wannabe-Brian? AND " 'Tad' Jennings" from the band 'Elton John' a wannabe-Elton?)

i like it, especially V:)!

WILL THOMAS' PALimerick in a GV-disc edit/interpretation. Thanks Will whoever you are - and please bare with me!
The following setting is Brian talking to electro-theremin player Paul Tanner during a Good Vibrations session:


"Tan, GO noter... a disc I peek at"

"In a temple: hot sin, a mad rat"

"Ere we mentally handicapped person... a man

is to help me, Tan!"

"I take Epic's, I dare, to NO gnat!"


I:) = 'TANner,  take down some music notation for me'
II:) = referring to the churchy part...
III:)  "Ere we mentally handicapped person..."= putting GV on the back burner
III+IV:) "a man is to help me, Tan"= that man being Van
V:) = maybe offering the disc to another record label like this one under Coliumbia - but to NO bloodsuckers!

This is a tanka (5-7-5-7-7) inspired by the wild one-word story:

Montana Jenkem
Intensely farted in haste
King Lettuce meanwhile
Inserted large bananas
Encrusted with Bruce's shorts

Here's another off-topic example. It begins palindrome- (a word b.t.w. given to the world by THE GREEK!) limerick-like and the last 4 lines more tanka'drome-like. But brilliantly done (Grexodus or not, whatever your take on it might be).

€UROPEAN €CONOMICS by Steven Fraser:


EU never went so crap

Bust it up, I say.   Apt?

Np, we were holistic

I fed Euro greed

I cede vast capital


A tip: act, rave, decide

Ergo, rue "deficit silo" here

We won't pay! As I put it:

Subpar cost, new revenue

Sorry Steven, I made 2 typos within your limerick-ish palindrome. Let me put'em right!...

€UROPEAN €CONOMICS by Steven Fraser:


EU never went so crap

Bust it up, I say.  Apt?

No, we were holistic

I fed €uro greed

I cede vast capital


A tip: act, save, decide

Ergo, rue "deficit silo" here

We won't pay!  As I put it:

Subpar cost, new revenue

Splendid stuff, guys. :=)

Here are 10 more palindromericks: They are palindromic only as far as the limericks evolve around the palindrome as a concept.

# 5,6,8,11,12,13,14,17,21 & 22. Number 18 is the original UNCENSORED version of Will Thomas' real palindromerick!:

hardsoft.us/LIM/hgl.htm

My link doesn't seem to work. Can someone please retrieve it, please (google palindromericks)...

RS, if I Google palindromericks I get 2 hits, one to this thread and the other to here:

http://hardsoft.us/LIM/hgl.htm





   

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Top-notch, RS! :=)