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I posted a very raw version of this song here a long time ago and have finally had a chance to record it a bit better.  The timing gets away from me a bit, but it is a work in progress.  Forgive the canned drums, they are the only drums I know how to play.  :)

https://soundcloud.com/empireoflove/holiday-with-you-vii

Have a listen and let me know what you think.

EoL

Catchy melody. Maybe the vocals should be louder.

Okay here goes...

Loved it, I think the vocals for the song very well. I'd personally make them a bit louder and add a tiny more reverb to them, considering they're mid range.

Stylistically, I really like mix, the dry feel you have going is nice!
I can't tell if you have a bass line yet... If you're interested I could take a swing at a hot bass line and send it your way if you send me some chords :)
I would consider adding a little reverb to the drums, but that's honestly stylistic and what you've got is great in a different way!

Going along with the style, I would recommend adding some nice harmonies, they'd fit beautifully with this style you've got here.

I love the story it tells, not many people worry about painting a storyboard for the listener, it's something I always try to do that you've really done here, awesome work.

So in conclusion, love it! Awesome work.

Thank you for the kind words FOTM...

Regarding the reverb on the drums: I have been using GarageBand and the latest version does not have the option to add reverb to MIDI drum tracks.  Strange, I know.  I've since downloaded Logic Pro X but have not had a chance to mess with the reverb in Logic.

Reverb on the vocals: there is a touch of reverb on the second vocal track (which is lower in the mix). 

Volume of vocals: I've taken your advice, and Rab's, and Swedish Frog's, and have increased the volume some on the vocals.  After I play around with the reverb and add a few other things I will upload a link to the revised version.  Any further comments are greatly appreciated.

Harmony: I wouldn't know where to begin.  Zach once posted links to some harmony tutorials on Youtube, but I lost the links before I could listen.  If you want to give it a shot and I will see if I can duplicate it, that would be great.

Bass: I don't have a bass line and have no idea how to come up with one.  Again, if you want to give it a shot please do.  I'll PM the chords to you ('cause the four chords I use are top secret).  ;)

Thanks for your comments regarding the story/lyrics.  Its not Bob Dylan but I like them anyway, I'm glad someone else does too.

EoL

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Zach that would be great.  If you need anything from me (chords, whatever) let me know.

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I haven't got much of a range so it might be best to do what sounds best, I can always find someone else to sing the harmonies.  I'll PM you a bit more info.

Good stuff. The relaxed vocal with the guitar lines work well together. Would be good to hear some harmonies on top.

MBW:  Thanks for listening.  I believe Zach is working on some harmonies and FOTM may be doing a bass line.  It would be nice to fill in the sound some.